From a22b834532ce1576ed5747811f795761413c1920 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: karlchillmaid <karl.chillmaid@digital.cabinet-office.gov.uk>
Date: Thu, 30 Sep 2021 16:35:53 +0100
Subject: [PATCH] Update Privacy page content

---
 app/templates/views/privacy.html | 27 +++++++++++++--------------
 1 file changed, 13 insertions(+), 14 deletions(-)

diff --git a/app/templates/views/privacy.html b/app/templates/views/privacy.html
index 86c5581f9..47d767d43 100644
--- a/app/templates/views/privacy.html
+++ b/app/templates/views/privacy.html
@@ -28,25 +28,25 @@
 
     <h2 class="heading-medium">What data we collect from you</h2>
 
-    <p class="govuk-body">The personal data we collect from public sector employees that create a GOV.UK Notify account will include:</p>
+    <p class="govuk-body">The personal data we collect from public sector employees that create a GOV.UK Notify account includes:</p>
 
     <ul class="list list-bullet">
-        <li>Your name</li>
-        <li>Your email address</li>
-        <li>Your mobile phone number</li>
-        <li>The IP address you use to access GOV.UK Notify</li>
+        <li>your name</li>
+        <li>your email address</li>
+        <li>your mobile phone number</li>
+        <li>the IP address you use to access GOV.UK Notify</li>
     </ul>
 
-    <p class="govuk-body">The legal basis for processing this data is public task – allowing you to access GOV.UK Notify to send notifications
+    <p class="govuk-body">The legal basis for processing this data is ‘public task’ – allowing you to access GOV.UK Notify to send notifications
       to users of your public service.</p>
 
     <h2 class="heading-medium">Why we need your data</h2>
 
-    <p class="govuk-body">We require your personal data to ensure only legitimate users of GOV.UK Notify can use it to send notifications.</p>
+    <p class="govuk-body">We need your personal data to ensure that only legitimate users of GOV.UK Notify can use it to send notifications.</p>
 
     <h2 class="heading-medium">What we do with your data</h2>
 
-    <p class="govuk-body">We use your data to check that you are allowed to access GOV.UK Notify and to record your activity when using it.</p>
+    <p class="govuk-body">We use your data to check that you are allowed to access GOV.UK Notify and to record your activity when using it. We use third party suppliers to do this.</p>
 
     <p class="govuk-body">We will not:</p>
 
@@ -63,12 +63,11 @@
 
     <h2 class="heading-medium">Where your data is processed and stored</h2>
 
-    <p class="govuk-body">We design, build and run our systems to make sure that your data is as safe as possible at any stage, both while it’s
+    <p class="govuk-body">We design, build and run our systems to make sure that your data is as safe as possible at every stage, both while it’s
       processed and when it’s stored.</p>
 
-    <p class="govuk-body">Your personal data will not be transferred outside of the European Economic Area (EEA) throughout the course of its
-      processing at GDS or any third party suppliers.</p>
-
+    <p class="govuk-body">Your personal data will be processed both in the United Kingdom and the European Economic Area (EEA). Your data receives the same level of protection in the EEA as it does in the UK through the safeguard of <a class="govuk-link govuk-link--no-visited-state" href="https://ico.org.uk/for-organisations/dp-at-the-end-of-the-transition-period/data-protection-and-the-eu-in-detail/adequacy/">Adequacy Decisions</a>.</p>
+   
     <h2 class="heading-medium">How we protect your data and keep it secure</h2>
 
     <p class="govuk-body">We are committed to doing all that we can to keep your data secure. To prevent unauthorised access or disclosure we have
@@ -114,7 +113,7 @@
     <p class="govuk-body">Contact the GDS Privacy Team if you either:</p>
 
     <ul class="list list-bullet">
-      <li>have any questions about anything in this document</li>
+      <li>have questions about anything in this document</li>
       <li>think that your personal data has been misused or mishandled</li>
     </ul>
 
@@ -140,7 +139,7 @@
 
     <p class="govuk-body">
     Information Commissioner’s Office<br>
-    <a class="govuk-link govuk-link--no-visited-state" href="mailto:casework@ico.org.uk">casework@ico.org.uk</a><br>
+    <a class="govuk-link govuk-link--no-visited-state" href="mailto:icocasework@ico.org.uk">icocasework@ico.org.uk</a><br>
     0303 123 1113</br>
     Wycliffe House<br>
     Water Lane<br>