diff --git a/app/templates/views/privacy.html b/app/templates/views/privacy.html
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--- a/app/templates/views/privacy.html
+++ b/app/templates/views/privacy.html
@@ -1,27 +1,23 @@
 {% extends "withoutnav_template.html" %}
 
 {% block per_page_title %}
-  Privacy notice
+  Privacy notice: how we use your data
 {% endblock %}
 
 {% block maincolumn_content %}
 
 <div class="grid-row">
   <div class="column-two-thirds">
-    <h1 class="heading-large">Privacy notice</h1>
+    <h1 class="heading-large">Privacy notice: how we use your data</h1>
 
-    <p>Date last modified: 23 May 2018</p>
+    <p>Last update: 25 May 2018</p>
 
     <h2 class="heading-medium">Who we are</h2>
 
-    <p>GOV.UK Notify is provided by the Government Digital Service (GDS) which is part of the Cabinet Office.
-      Our job is the digital transformation of government.</p>
-
-    <p>We are a centre of excellence in digital, technology and data, collaborating with departments to help
-      them with their own transformation. We work with them to build platforms, standards and digital services.</p>
-
     <p>GOV.UK Notify is a service that lets public service teams in the UK send emails, text messages, and letters
       to users of their service.</p>
+    
+    <p>GOV.UK Notify is provided by the Government Digital Service (GDS) which is part of the Cabinet Office.</p>
 
     <p>Organisations sending notifications using GOV.UK Notify are the data controller and Cabinet Office is the data processor.</p>
 
@@ -30,7 +26,7 @@
     <p>For more information see the Information Commissioner’s Office (ICO) <a href="https://ico.org.uk/esdwebpages/search">Data Protection Public Register</a>.
       The Cabinet Office registration number is: Z7414053</p>
 
-    <h2 class="heading-medium">What data we need</h2>
+    <h2 class="heading-medium">What data we collect from you</h2>
 
     <p>The personal data we collect from public sector employees that create a GOV.UK Notify account will include:</p>
 
@@ -65,10 +61,10 @@
 
     <p>We will retain your personal data for as long as you have a GOV.UK Notify account.</p>
 
-    <h2 class="heading-medium">Where your data might go</h2>
+    <h2 class="heading-medium">Where your data is processed and stores</h2>
 
-    <p>Our IT infrastructure and technology has been validated from inception to delivery with supporting contracts to ensure
-      compliance with all data sharing activities.</p>
+    <p>We design, build and run our systems to make sure that your data is as safe as possible at any stage, both while it’s 
+      processed and when it’s stored.</p>
 
     <p>Your personal data will not be transferred outside of the European Economic Area (EEA) throughout the course of its
       processing at GDS or any third party suppliers.</p>
@@ -88,17 +84,24 @@
 
     <h2 class="heading-medium">What are your rights</h2>
 
-    <p>You have the right to:</p>
+    <p>You have the right to request:</p>
 
     <ul class="list list-bullet">
-        <li>request information about how your personal data are processed and to request a copy of that personal data</li>
-        <li>request that any inaccuracies in your personal data are rectified without delay</li>
-        <li>request that any incomplete personal data are completed, including by means of a supplementary statement</li>
-        <li>request that your personal data are erased if there is no longer a justification for them to be processed</li>
-        <li>request that the processing of your personal data is restricted in certain circumstances – for example, where accuracy is contested</li>
-        <li>request a copy of any personal data you have provided, and for this to be provided in a structured, commonly used and machine-readable format</li>
+      <li>information about how your personal data is processed</li>
+      <li>a copy of that personal data - this copy will be provided in a structured, commonly used and machine-readable format</li>
+      <li>that anything inaccurate in your personal data is corrected immediately</li>
     </ul>
 
+    <p>You can also:</p>
+
+    <ul class="list list-bullet">
+      <li>raise an objection about how your personal data is processed</li>
+      <li>request that your personal data is erased if there is no longer a justification for it</li>
+      <li>ask that the processing of your personal data is restricted in certain circumstances</li>
+    </ul>
+
+    <p>If you have any of these requests, get in contact with our Data Protection Officer - you can find their contact details below.</p>
+
     <h2 class="heading-medium">Changes to this notice</h2>
 
     <p>We may modify or amend this privacy notice at our discretion at any time. When we make changes to this notice, we will
@@ -106,10 +109,19 @@
       to you and your data as of that revision date. We encourage you to periodically review this privacy notice to be informed
       about how we are protecting your data.</p>
 
-    <h2 class="heading-medium">How to contact us</h2>
+    <h2 class="heading-medium">Questions and complaints</h2>
 
-    <p>If you have any questions about anything in this document or if you consider that your personal data has been misused or
-      mishandled you can contact the Data Protection Officer (DPO) at: DPO@cabinetoffice.gov.uk</p>
+    <p>Contact the Data Protection Officer if you either:</p>
+    
+    <ul class="list list-bullet">
+      <li>have any questions about anything in this document</li>
+      <li>think that your personal data has been misused or mishandled</li>
+    </ul>
+
+    <p>
+    Data Protection Officer<br>
+    DPO@cabinetoffice.gov.uk
+    </p>
 
     <p>Or by post at:</p>
 
@@ -120,8 +132,13 @@
     London SW1A 2AS
     </p>
 
-    <p>You may also make a complaint to the Information Commissioner, who is an independent regulator. The Information
-      Commissioner can be contacted at: casework@ico.org.uk or on 0303 123 1113.</p>
+    <p>You may also make a complaint to the Information Commissioner, who is an independent regulator.</p>
+    
+    <p>
+    The Information Commissioner<br>
+    casework@ico.org.uk<br>
+    0303 123 1113
+    </p>
 
     <p>Or by post at:</p>